Question haunts me
How a looser one gets hurt
With breaking link?
With target missing?
With size not fitting?
With censor getting wrong choice?
With unknown signaling?
Question haunts me
How a binding cord gets loosened?
Perhaps participants evade mediators
Those make beginning of reaction,
Those make plug in signals,
Those build the worship place
Those choice God’s shrines
Those do not make empty promises,
Those do make visualization on God’s mirth,
And keep the choice at the envelops,
Co-efficient of long term relationship.
Determination of one part is loosed
That I find in the red and green signals
And the weak heart gets shocked
In the affected ground the mind is built,
The magical power gets termination,
And sad footsteps come down on looser heart.
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Jan Oscar Hansen • how to write a rude poem without using rude words
Spring, and pretty flowers have opened up, even those
that pretend they are not in a loving disposition.
Not many bees around anymore because of chemicals
farmers spray on crops many have gone metro and lost
interest, fly low over still water so they can admire their
flying skill, or sit on the sunny wall of my house full of
self admiration; some hang languidly around a honey jar.
The few that still take interest in beautiful flowers are
exhausted and drop dead long before the day is over.
Pretty flowers close petals over moist carpel and hope
for a better luck tomorrow.
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ASIM KUMAR PAUL • Yes, dear friend, Jan Oscar Hansen, you are right. Sweetness is more important in a poem. Thanks
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Jan Oscar Hansen • thank you Asim Kumar Paul
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ASIM KUMAR PAUL • Dear friend, Jan Oscar Hansen, the re-writing of the poem gets this form:
LOOSER HEART OF LOVE
In searching answers that haunts me so long,
How a heart feels looser in life of harsh days,
That it may come from link that is broken often,
That it may come from the missing of target,
And this target is something that does not fit
To the desires of life, and it seconds in fulfillment list.
Or the sensor of our feeling gets wrong signals,
Like tossed paper boats near the cliff,
Waiting for something on the score of gaining.
How my heart gets haunts with the questions,
It is in the loosened mood around the loveliest forms,
And the participants are not caring own liking
Where mediators are weathered away with
The eviction of naughty waves that binds nothing,
Yet the mind feels to worship the work of God,
And the life is not full of empty promises,
The life has some vision on our existence,
Sanctioned by God, filled with accompanying
Someone who casts a desire in sharing of love,
Where terms of relationship are not foreign things.
Signals come many ways to fill the heart,
With success, in work, or in love, we are in mood,
Over red and green signals, the heart being red heat,
To feel the strong presence over earth’s loveliness,
And when we lose this magical power, we get hurt,
Our looser heart for love gets pain in unlikely gains.
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