tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7391884352747180773.post7321313138770215052..comments2024-02-28T01:32:42.225-08:00Comments on Living with Poetry: LOOSER HEART OF LOVELiving with Poetry, poems by Asim Kumar Paulhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13517601024278386660noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7391884352747180773.post-73868455766171188562012-04-24T09:02:19.949-07:002012-04-24T09:02:19.949-07:00Discussion of my poem at Poetry and Fiction Writer...Discussion of my poem at Poetry and Fiction Writers Subgroup -- Writers Cafe' in LinkedIn.com<br /><br /><br />My love poem, LOOSER HEART OF LOVE<br />Living with Poetry asimkumarpaul.blogspot.in<br />With censor getting wrong choice? How a binding cord gets loosened? Perhaps participants evade mediators Those make beginning of reaction, Those do not make empty promises, Those do make visualization on God’s mirth, And keep...<br />1 month ago<br />Like CommentFollow Flag More<br />4 comments<br /> <br />Follow Jan Oscar<br />Jan Oscar Hansen • how to write a rude poem without using rude words <br /><br />Spring, and pretty flowers have opened up, even those <br />that pretend they are not in a loving disposition. <br />Not many bees around anymore because of chemicals <br />farmers spray on crops many have gone metro and lost <br />interest, fly low over still water so they can admire their <br />flying skill, or sit on the sunny wall of my house full of <br />self admiration; some hang languidly around a honey jar. <br />The few that still take interest in beautiful flowers are <br />exhausted and drop dead long before the day is over. <br />Pretty flowers close petals over moist carpel and hope <br />for a better luck tomorrow.<br />18 days ago• Unlike 1<br /> <br />ASIM KUMAR PAUL • Yes, dear friend, Jan Oscar Hansen, you are right. Sweetness is more important in a poem. Thanks<br />17 days ago<br /> <br />Follow Jan Oscar<br />Jan Oscar Hansen • thank you Asim Kumar Paul<br />17 days ago• Unlike 1<br /> <br />ASIM KUMAR PAUL • Dear friend, Jan Oscar Hansen, the re-writing of the poem gets this form: <br /><br /><br />LOOSER HEART OF LOVE <br /><br />In searching answers that haunts me so long, <br />How a heart feels looser in life of harsh days, <br />That it may come from link that is broken often, <br />That it may come from the missing of target, <br />And this target is something that does not fit <br />To the desires of life, and it seconds in fulfillment list. <br />Or the sensor of our feeling gets wrong signals, <br />Like tossed paper boats near the cliff, <br />Waiting for something on the score of gaining. <br /><br />How my heart gets haunts with the questions, <br />It is in the loosened mood around the loveliest forms, <br />And the participants are not caring own liking <br />Where mediators are weathered away with <br />The eviction of naughty waves that binds nothing, <br />Yet the mind feels to worship the work of God, <br />And the life is not full of empty promises, <br />The life has some vision on our existence, <br />Sanctioned by God, filled with accompanying <br />Someone who casts a desire in sharing of love, <br />Where terms of relationship are not foreign things. <br /><br />Signals come many ways to fill the heart, <br />With success, in work, or in love, we are in mood, <br />Over red and green signals, the heart being red heat, <br />To feel the strong presence over earth’s loveliness, <br />And when we lose this magical power, we get hurt, <br />Our looser heart for love gets pain in unlikely gains.<br />17 days ago• DeleteLiving with Poetry, poems by Asim Kumar Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13517601024278386660noreply@blogger.com